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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:19, 8 March 2020 (UTC)
Lead
"the two main powers of the western Mediterranean" - Should we indicate a time frame for this dominancy, like "ancient western Mediterranean" or throwing in the century?
"At the Battle of Cape Ecnomus they were again beaten" - not 100% clear which army "they" is referring to.
"but not believing they could hold it, they razed and abandoned it. " - Can this get rephrased so that it is not used twice in quick repetition?
"Next year they lost another 150 ships to a storm" - Possibly "The next year..." would be better.
"The Treaty of Lutatius was signed by which Carthage paid large reparations and Sicily was annexed as a Roman province." - The first part of this sentence reads a bit weird to me, but I'm not entirely sure what's wrong ("was signed by which Carthage" reads funny to me).
Sources
"The modern historian Anne Curry considers "Polybius turns out to [be] fairly reliable"." - Is considers the best word here, it makes the tense feel a little weird.
Background
"Carthage ... on at least one occasion used their navy to ferry" - Is Carthage and their the correct case matching here? My instinct would be to match Carthage with it (referring to the city) and to use their for Carthaginians. However, I'm not the greatest at grammar, so you may be correct here.
Armies
"They all carried short thrusting swords: in addition the front rank carried two javelins ..." - I'm not sure that the colon is the best option here.
"also employed war elephants; African forest elephants were" - Can you fix the MOS:SEAOFBLUE here?
Sicily
"The Romans had an inadequate supply system, partly because the Carthaginian naval supremacy prevented them from shipped supplies by sea, and were not in any case accustomed to feeding an army as large as 40,000 men" - Something here's not quite right. Maybe add they to make "and they were not in any case"?
Comment on headings - We have two sections named Sicily, would it be possible to change one of them?
Rome builds a fleet - So quinqueremes means "five-oared", not "five oared ship" or something like that? I'm not familiar with Latin, and you seem to be, so I'll trust that this is correct but I just want to make sure.
"A quinquereme carried a crew of 300: 280 oarsmen and 20 deck crew and officers;[69] it would also normally carry a complement of 40 marines;[70] if battle was thought to be imminent this would be increased to as many as 120." - This is a lot of clauses in one sentence. Would it make sense to you to break it into two sentences between ref 69 and the next word?
"Boodes ships attacked" - Should this be "Boodes' ships attacked"?
"In 257 BC there was a typical chance encounter." - This seems like an odd way to introduce a notable battle.
Invasion of Africa
You refer to Hanno the Great and Hamilcar mustering the Carthaginian fleet against the Romans. Are you referring to Hamilcar (Drepanum) or Hamilcar Barca? They were both active in this war.
Second paragraph of this section - Unless I missed it, you never give the name of the battle you describe here. That would be helpful information to the reader.
Is the Hamilcar mentioned in the third paragraph the same Hamilcar from earlier? So many similar names in this era
Caption from the map in this section
Hasdrubal should probably be wikilinked at first mention, since he hasn't been mentioned since the infobox. This is Hasdrubal the Fair, right? (He seems to be the only Hasdrubal listed at Hasdrubal who would be alive at this time frame, although he would be youngish for army command.
Sicily (second section)
You mention the two consuls of 254 BC, but what are these two consuls' names? The consuls for the year of this year would be different than the consuls of the year for the previous years described, unless the Romans decided to carryover these.
"They turned to the maritime offensive," - Should Carthaginians be specified at the start of the sentence (the context is established, but later in the sentence).
Aftermath - I know this is written in British English, but is there a word you could use besides "havered"? As a speaker of American English, I've never seen this word before and had to look it up. See MOS:COMMONALITY.
The references and images are all good, no signs of COPYVIO and AGF on the print sources.
Overall, a very good and informative article. Aside from the issues with that one caption, most of this is just copyedit that should be quick cleanup. Pinging nominator, Gog the Mild. Hog Farm (talk) 20:22, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
Passing this one for GA now. Hog Farm (talk) 23:17, 9 March 2020 (UTC)
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