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Nominator: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 16:28, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 06:55, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I should have a review written for this in about a week or so. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 06:55, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
Wolverine XI I've posted the review below. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 03:31, 27 April 2024 (UTC)
General:
Taxonomy:
The closest candidate is the Nepali word ponya– Can we get a translation for ponya?
Distribution:
Successful habitat preservation have seen– Is this grammatically correct?
to the panda's avoidance of competition– What type of competition? For specific food sources?
it was estimated that the range of the giant panda had declined to about 99% of its range in earlier millenniums– Is this supposed to say by about 99%? If I'm reading it correctly, then to about 99% would be hardly any change at all.
Description:
when viewed from a distance, the panda displays disruptive coloration while close up, they rely more on blending in– This needs to be restructured. The comma placement makes it unclear what's referring to what.
has a "thumb" and five fingers; the "thumb"– Avoid scare quotes. If it's not a thumb, then it shouldn't be called one. Maybe "similar to a thumb" or something like that.
Ecology:
consisting almost exclusively of bamboo (around 99%)– This would be cleaner if the parenthetical were removed so it reads something like "with approximately 99% of its diet consisting of bamboo".
Similarly, the giant panda's round face– It's not really "similar", it's still discussing the same aspect.
such as Fargesia dracocephala and Fargesia rufa.– Are these the two of the most common? If so, it should say so. If not, there's no need to name them specifically.
Behavior:
Though the panda is often assumed to be docile, it has been known to attack humans– This needs more context. It could be read in any way from "it's incredibly rare and even then only toward children" to "contrary to popular belief, pandas frequently attack humans on sight".
A pandas size can be conveyed through the height of the scent mark– Apostrophe
to try extreme methods– Avoid editorializing.
Only recently– When is "recently"?
The normal reproductive rate is considered to be one young every two yearsand
The interval between births in the wild is generally two years.
It is expected that zoos in destinations such as San Diego in the United States and Mexico City will now be able to– When is "now"?
Human interaction:
In the past, pandas were thought to be rare and noble creatures– When, and by whom?
The West first learned of the giant panda– Who is "The West"? Are we just talking about Western Europe?
which costs five times more than keeping the next most expensive animal– It's unclear whether this includes the loaning fee.
Conservation:
Its range is currently confined to a small portion on the western edge of its historical range– "Currently" should be put in context. How long has it been like this?
scientists believe the wild population may be as large as 3,000– This is in present tense, but the article was describing 2006.
As the species has been reclassified to "vulnerable" since 2016– Reclassified from what?
Spot checks:
get through the nutrient-scarce period from late August to April, when they feed mostly on bamboo leavesand the source says survive the nutrient-scarce period from late August to April, where only bamboo leaves are available to eat.
Major aspects:
Minor details:
(hence it is always boiled when used for human consumption)– Not relevant to pandas.
For six years, scientists studied six pandas tagged with GPS collars at the Foping Reserve in the Qinling Mountains. They took note of their foraging and mating habits and analyzed samples of their food and feces. The pandas would move from the valleys into the Qinling Mountains and would only return to the valleys in autumn.– Is this one study of pandas worth highlighting over all of the others? The article already says they move between environments, so saying there was a study about it doesn't really add much.
A seven-year-old female named Jin Yi– This one panda's death isn't significant enough for inclusion. The article should cover what's generally known to affect pandas, not specific instances.
The cub was born at 07:41 on 23 July that year in Sichuan as the third cub of You You, an 11-year-old.– Another specific panda as opposed to general info.
In August 2014, a rare birth of panda triplets was announced in China; it was the fourth of such births ever reported.– Another specific birth.
No recent disputes.
All images are licensed and captioned. The only change that needs to be made is that the caption "feeding panda" is vague. Maybe "A panda feeding on bamboo"?
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