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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien (talk · contribs) 01:03, 2 October 2023 (UTC)
Seems interesting. I'll have a review posted within the next couple days. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 01:03, 2 October 2023 (UTC)
Sammielh, I've done the source review, and enough close paraphrasing came up that it needs to be addressed before anything else. I'm not going to quickfail the review, but it's unclear at this point how much of an issue it is. I suggest going through the article and checking where the text resembles the source, especially in places where a long passage is only supported by one source. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 17:48, 2 October 2023 (UTC)
She joined the Delta Gamma sorority [...] to advocate for ratification of the 19th amendment in the state legislature.Thebiguglyalien (talk) 13:54, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
She joined a university committee to advocate for [...] the Delta Gamma sorority.This seems like a silly thing to hold up the review over, so I made a quick change to the wording by splitting it into two sentences. Feel free to fiddle with the wording some more if you think there's a better way to present the information. In the meantime, I'll be happy to pass the article as a GA. Thebiguglyalien (talk) 14:53, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
General notes:
Early life:
he moved the family to her grandparents' ranch near Caldwell, Idaho– Do we know why? The way this sentence is worded makes it sound like there's some specific intent.
and they and their cousins were encouraged by the family to be thoughtful and share their opinions– This is vague enough that it doesn't really mean anything, and her cousins aren't really relevant to the article. I suggest removing this.
Although the editor wanted a boy, she wrote for the paper for the next couple years– Then how did she get hired?
She joined a sorority and a university committee to advocate for ratification of the 19th amendment in the state legislature.– Do we know which sorority? Also, this wording makes it seem like she joined the sorority to advocate ratification.
Career:
under the byline of Nancy Randolph– Why?
although she approached her subject the same way she had the news, with an investigative eye and humor– This doesn't really say anything meaningful.
Hitler's plans for gas warfare– If this is referring to chemical warfare, that's a more common term for it.
Although she was covering World War II– What is the "although" for?
although it was quickly resolved– Was it resolved in a way that had any meaningful change? If not, the dispute might not be relevant at all.
which sent Robb flying– This seems dramatic.
She was the first female correspondent to be honored with the prize and subsequently covered the 1953 coronation– These two ideas seem to be entirely unrelated.
She was sued for libel in 1955, following a column that she wrote– What did she write? Who won the lawsuit?
Later life:
Her husband died of a heart attack in 1979– Do we know the date, or at least the month? Right now we don't actually know who died first.
Death and legacy:
She received honors during her career from the New York Newspaper Women's Club and Theta Sigma Phi.– Is this relevant to her death? If not, it shouldn't be grouped into the same paragraph with it.
Robb is largely forgotten in the modern day– This is a debatable claim. I suggest either attributing this or giving a more specific description of how well known she is.
however she did not work publicly to challenge the barriers that prevented other women from joining the profession– This seems judgemental rather than descriptive. It's usually not necessary to describe what someone didn't do.
I'm a little hesitant about using a thesis as a source, but it's good enough for GA, especially since it looks like Edy was already published by the time of the thesis. All other sources seem reliable.
Spot checks:
Robb attended the University of Idaho on a full scholarship in 1918, where she joined a sorority and was a writer for two local papers. She joined a university committee to advocate for ratification of the 19th amendment, giving women the right to vote, in the state legislatureversus the source: Robb won a full scholarship to attend the University of Idaho in 1918. She belonged to a sorority, wrote for two local newspapers and served on a campus committee charged with persuading the Idaho legislature to ratify the 19th amendment and grant women the right to vote. The article takes the same sentences from the source and just changes or rearranges the words. Only the facts and ideas should be taken from the source, not the wording or sentence structure, or even necessarily the order they're presented if there's more than one valid way to present them.
In November 1953, Robb left her job with the INS and began writing a column for Scripps-Howard and United Feature Syndicate. Her column was carried by 140 newspapers.versus In 1953 she joined the Scripps‐Howard Newspapers and the United Features Syndicate. Her column was carried in 140 newspapers.
No major part of her life is omitted. No excessive detail.
No neutrality issues or undue weight.
No disputes, no reason to believe the content in the article will soon need to be significantly changed.
File:Commencement speaker Inez Callaway Robb.jpg and File:Commencement speaker Inez Callaway Robb (02).jpg should have more specific tags so we know why they're public domain. Images from the 1950s are recent enough to need a reason why they're in the public domain.
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