Yazathingyan (15th-century minister))
- ... that Chief Minister Yazathingyan of Ava offered the Ava throne to the rightful heir Prince Thihathu of Prome only after his first choice Thihapate of Mohnyin declined it? Source: Sources: (Yazawin Thit Vol. 1 2012: 286), (Hmannan Vol. 2 2003: 81), (Aung-Thwin 2017: 91)
Created by Hybernator (talk). Self-nominated at 01:21, 29 August 2022 (UTC).
- Article is long enough and new enough.
- No issues with WP:BLP or WP:NPOV
- Earwig finds no issues, but Earwig probably doesn't access to any of the sources. I'm going to AGF on this one.
- No issues with the referencing.
- QPQ is done.
- ALT0 is acceptable, but I think we can do better with something shorter. Maybe:
- This is OK with the original hook, but some work to find a better hook could result in an improvement. As mentioned above, if we could find a hook which showed off the very nice image, that would be great. Overall, a really nice job, and make an excellent GA nomination. -- RoySmith (talk) 15:30, 14 September 2022 (UTC)
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- This is borderline maybe, because it plays around with Minye Kyawswa (crown prince, died 1415) and Minye Kyawswa I of Ava (king, died 1442). But I find it to be rather hooky, and it could use the pic. –LordPeterII (talk) 18:41, 14 September 2022 (UTC)
- (I shortened ALT1 a bit by leaving out "of Ava", because it was almost 200 chars, and I don't think it's needed.) –LordPeterII (talk) 18:44, 14 September 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks RoySmith, LordPeterII; sorry, couldn't reply sooner; the week just got away from me. I think ALT1 is definitely more hooky but might be a bit too long. But I can't think of a better way to make it shorter, so I'm fine with it. As a second choice, I'm ok with ALT0a. Cheers. Hybernator (talk) 03:43, 17 September 2022 (UTC)
- Hi @RoySmith:, could you take a look and provide feedback? Thanks. Hybernator (talk) 03:44, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
- I find that kind of confusing, but I'm can't think of a way to improve it, sorry. -- RoySmith (talk) 14:51, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
- @RoySmith and Hybernator: Alright, let me suggest some alternatives:
- ALT1b is basically just shortened to leave out the "rightful ruler" part which isn't needed for hookiness imo. ALT2 provides a much shorter alternative that still supports the image. –LordPeterII (talk) 21:14, 13 October 2022 (UTC)
- I really like ALT2. Let's go with that! -- RoySmith (talk) 21:21, 13 October 2022 (UTC)